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Some people tend to take temporary jobs (they only work for few months of year), for they have time to do other things. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that
jobs
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 are very
imprtant
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important
 in our lives.
While
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 it is a commonly held
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belief
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 that
tend
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people tend
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 to take temporary
jobs
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.
While
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 there is
also
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 an argument that some people tend to take permanent
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.
This
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 essay will
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discuss
this
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion.
Body paragraph 1
On one hand, temporary
jobs
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its
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are its
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assit
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help
to
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in
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 doing
alot
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a lot
 of
thing
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things
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 out of work,
its allow
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allowing
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 more time to
doing
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do
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 your personal
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goals
.
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, open your own store.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,
the
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a
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 permanent
job
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that safty
job
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, but the main problem that most
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people fear about it is the fear of
daily
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the daily
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 routine.
Body paragraph 3
However
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, if you have
fixed
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a fixed
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job
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job,
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 you can
acheive
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achieve
 your goals in your
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as well as
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 your personal goals.
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, you can go your work in
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 weeks,
while
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in
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at
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weekend
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weekends
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 it is your time to do other things.
Body paragraph 4
Moreover
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, the balance between
the
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work and personal life is not easy for everyone
, you
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. You
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 will be smart and accurate to choose
you
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your
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piorarity
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priority
 and take
the all
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all the
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chanses
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chances
 to improve
your self
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yourself
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.
Conclusion
In
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conclusion
, despite people having different views, I believe that having
fixed
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a fixed
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job
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 is
great
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a great
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 idea for the
indevidual
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individual
,
becuse
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because
 when you have
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a job
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job
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job,
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 you will
recive
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receive
 your salary , you can set a plan to save your
monet
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money
 after
that
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that,
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 you can
acheive
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achieve
 your goals and dreams.

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cohesion
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content
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content
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structure
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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