The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The
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displays the
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UK
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's
population
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whose age
are
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over 65 both in 1985 and the predictions in 2035. The
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is divided
by
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five
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,
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England, Wales, Scotland, Northern
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, and
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UK
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the UK
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. From the
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, around 12 to 16
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of
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UK's
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the UK's
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citizens are over the age of 65.
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is much below the 2035 prediction
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citizens over the age of 65 reach from 23
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up to 26
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percent
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. England has an 8
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growth from 15
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percent
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in 1985 to 23
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percent
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predicted in 2035.
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UK
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have the same
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as England. The ageing
population
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in 1985
is
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15
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percent
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while
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the prediction in 2035 is
in
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23
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. Moving to Wales, its growth in
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the predicted
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ageing
population
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reach 26
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percent
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in 2035, showing a 10
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percent
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increase.
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area has the highest predicted ageing
population
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in 2035. Next is Scotland, where the prediction is at 25
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, showing
11
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an 11
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increase compared to 14
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percent
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in 1985. The
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one is Northern Ireland,
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it is
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predicted to have 23
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percent
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citizens over 65 in 2035.
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this
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is 11
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percent
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more ageing
citizen
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citizens
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compared to 1985.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, uk, population, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ageing population
  • Demographics
  • Percentage
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Predictions
  • Proportion
  • Region/Regional
  • Statistics
  • Gradual change
  • Elderly
  • Life expectancy
  • Healthcare
  • Birth rate
  • Comparative analysis
  • Trend
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