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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two charts illustrate the
compared
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 proportion of
food
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 and
goods
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 bought from supermarkets in European countries between 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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, after a decade in every
country
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, there was an upward trend
on
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in
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 buying
food
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 and
goods
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 in supermarkets. In 1998, around 10% of
food
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 and almost 20%
goods
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 were bought in
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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 in
Country
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 1, and there was a
jumping
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jump in
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trend
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the trend
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on
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of
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 buying groceries in
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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 over the
last
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 10 years.
Country
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 2
also
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 shows an increasing
supermarket
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-bought
food
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 and
goods
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,
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;
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however
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 the increase was not as significant as
Country
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 1. The increase was about 5% on
food
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 and 10% on
goods
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. Not only the first two countries,
Country
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 3's
supermarket
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 customers
on
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for
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food
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 and
goods
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was
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were
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also
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 increasing.
Although
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,
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apply
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 shopping in
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supermarket
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the supermarket
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 was not as popular as
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Country
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in Country
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 1 and
Country
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 2, the gain of customers was almost twice
than
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that
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10
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of 10
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 years earlier, but with only less than 5% in 1998 and less than 10% in 2008. In conclusion, all countries
has
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have
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 an increasing number of
supermarket
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 shoppers
on
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for
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food
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 and
goods
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,
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however
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however,
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 each
country
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 has
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a diffrent
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diffrent
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different
 amount of growth.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods, country, supermarket with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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