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We have been living in the nuelear age now for over half a century. Since the first atomic bombs were developed, nuclear technology has provided governments with the ability to totally destroy the planet. Yet the technology has been put to positive use as an energy source and in certain areas of medicine. To what extent is nuclear technology a danger to life on Earth? What are the benefits and risks associated with its use?

Most of the developed countries have used nuclear
power
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 for decades. If
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use
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 properly, nuclear factories can generate
stabel
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stable
 and affordable energy.
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, it
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also will
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will also
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 threaten
to
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all
humannkinds
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humankind
 and the
environrment
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environment
 if
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 without caution.
This
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to
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use
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 nuclear technology on
earth
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,
as well as
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 explain the possible advantages and drawbacks. On the one hand, nuclear
power
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 is an ideal option to replace fossil
fuel
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fuels
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. Most
of
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nations desire to find
out
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an alternative method to generate
power
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 because traditional fuel cannot
fulfill
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 the needs of all human beings. Under strict regulations and safety
insfrastructures
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infrastructures
, nuclear generators can provide a massive
power
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 to supply the consumption in a metropolis.
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, the UK government
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 to
use
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 nuclear
power
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 in some regions.
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, residents can enjoy a low price
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 electricity. It can be beneficial to mitigate the
living
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apply
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of cost
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cost of
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 in citizens and solve the shortage of fuel for
the
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governments.
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, at the same time, nuclear
power
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 will be fatal if we
use
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carelessly
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it carelessly
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. Nuclear reaction involves a series of chemical
reaction
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reactions
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 in
radiative
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 substances, so it will release a
substainal
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substantial
 amount of harmful and
radiative
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 materials to our surroundings if it has
explosion
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an explosion
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. To illustrate, a nuclear generate,in Japan
,
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 was
destory
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destroyed
 a decade ago because of
cannot
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 cool down. The nuclear waste
pollute
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pollutes
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 all
surrounds
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,including soil, air and ocean. Many nations
prohibited
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 to marine products
input
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from
this
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 area for
few
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a few
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 years.
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, an inappropriate adoption
in
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of
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 nuclear
power
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 can incur
an
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 catastrophic outcome. In conclusion,undoubtedly, nuclear
power
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 can produce
a
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an
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 inexpensive and steady energy
sources
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source
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 if we can comply with harsh regulations and be careful
to
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in to
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use
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. By
constrast
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contrast
, leakage of
radiative
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radioactive
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 materials can
have
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pose
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 a threat to all animals and our environment. Eventually, all countries should monitor each other to
use
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this
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 energy.

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structure
Plan before you write. Use four parts: intro, two body parts, and a short end.
content
Stick to one idea in each paragraph and give a clear example.
language
Fix spelling and grammar. Use easy words only, to be clear.
coherence
Link ideas with clear and, but, however, to show order and contrast.
accuracy
Check facts. If you name events, use simple true facts.
balance
You show both good and bad sides of nuclear power.
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You use real places to back points (UK, Japan).
argument
Your idea of energy being cheap is clear.
Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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