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The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years.

The charts illustrate
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two information about energy production in a country in two separate years , 1995 and 2005.
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it is clear that
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differences between categories ,as some figures are higher than others ,and the data is not the same for all groups. In detail, Coal recorded the highest figure in 2005 and 1995 as well
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 just over 29.80,Gas followed in the same years at approximately 30 per cent,meanwhile, Nuclear showed the lowest value in 2005 and others in 1995 at 4.90% Looking at the rest values in the charts, some data fall between the highest and the lowest,
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 others remain the same or slightly change In general, the charts show clear differences through the years between energy production ,
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,Coal, Nuclear,and other

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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