The table below shows expenditures of four car companies on advertising in the UK in 2002.

The table illustrates the sales of four different car
companies
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on
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several advertisements in the UK in 2002.
Overall
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, all four
companies
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spent a huge amount of money
of
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TV
advertisement
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,
while
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they spent less on Outdoor and Cinema
advertisement
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To begin
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with,
Cetirizine
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spent a huge amount of their money on TV
advertisment
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advertisement
by 70
million
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of
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dollar
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, the biggest investment among other
companies
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.
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,
Rover
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only spent 45
million
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on TV, the lowest
between
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other
companies
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. In press
advertisement
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,
renault
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Renault
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was the biggest
spendernwith
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spender with
45
million
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, followed by
Rover
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,
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Cetirizine
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Citroen
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, and Vauxhall respectively.
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four
companies
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have the same value on Radio
advertisement
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by 15
million
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, their spent on Cinema and Outdoor were less than 10
million
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. Evidently,
Rover
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and
Cetirizine
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had no investment
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Cinema,
while
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Renault and Vauxhall invested 6 and 5
million
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Lastly
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, Renault and Vauxhall invested 7
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on
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Outdoor
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advertisement
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,
while
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Cetirizine
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and
Rover
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only
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spent less than 5
million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words companies, advertisement, cetirizine, million, rover with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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