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The bar chart shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the
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results
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 of
survey
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a survey
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people's
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of people's
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 buying
bevergae
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behaviour
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such
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 as
,
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apply
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coffe
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coffee
 and tea and their
habbit
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habits
 in some Australian cities. It is clear from the chart that there are
diffrences
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differences
 between the cities, as some figures are higher than others and the data is not the same for all groups. In detail, Hobart and
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Melbourne
 city recorded approximately 65% for the highest number of went to a cafe for coffee or tea in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks.
Sydeny
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Sydney
 followed at just over around 61%. Meanwhile, Brisbane showed
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lowe
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lower
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 percentage in
went
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a
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the
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 cafe shop
comared
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compared
 with other cities. Looking at the rest of
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the data
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,the remaining figures fall between
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the highest
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 and lowest values.
Althogugh
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Although
,
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apply
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 some numbers are
silmilar
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similar
,each category shows a
diffrent
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different
 pattern over time. In
general
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general,
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 the chart shows clear differences between bought
coffe
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coffee
, tea and
thier
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their
habit
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habits
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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