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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the amount of
coffee
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 exported by Brazil, Colombia, and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012.
Overall
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, Brazil exported the largest amount of
coffee
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 during the period,
while
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 Colombia exported the smallest.
Although
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 there were some ups and downs,
exports
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 in all three countries increased by the end of the period. Brazil’s
coffee
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exports
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 increased from about 12
million
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kilograms
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 in 2002 to 15
million
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 in 2006,
then
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 rose to around 20
million
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 in 2008. After a small decrease in 2010,
exports
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 went up again to about 25
million
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kilograms
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 in 2012. Costa Rica started at 15
million
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kilograms
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, but
exports
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 fell to around 7
million
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 in 2006. After that, they increased steadily and reached 20
million
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kilograms
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 in 2012. Colombia exported the least
coffee
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. Its
exports
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 rose from 5
million
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kilograms
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 in 2002 to about 12
million
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 in 2006,
then
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 dropped sharply to around 2
million
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 in 2008.
However
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,
exports
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 recovered after that and increased to approximately 15
million
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kilograms
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 by 2012.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, exports, million, kilograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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