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Fossil fu els, such as coal, oil and natural gas, are the main source for many countries. However, some nations are using alternatie energy such as solar power and wind power. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Undoubtedly, hydrocarbons are essential for most
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the
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nations
,
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 for their economic development.
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Whilst
,
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apply
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 other
region
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regions
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 prefer to utilise
differet
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different
source
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sources
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 of
enery
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energy
 like solar
energy
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 and wind
energy
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.
This
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 essay will shed light on both
positive
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 and negative development of the provided issue.
Firstly
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, the positive aspects of using renewable
source
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sources
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 of
powers
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power
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is
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are
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that
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the
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 reduction in
environment
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environmental
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 pollution.
This
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 is because when the conventional fuels produce
contagious
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harmful
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gases
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 like Carbon
Oxide
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dioxide
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 on burning,
as a
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result
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result,
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it
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they
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 pollute the air and
put
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have
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effect
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an effect
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 on
green house
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greenhouse
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gases
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.
While
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 using clean energies
the
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, the
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 problem of air pollution decreased,and it
donot
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effect
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affect
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 the environment but
heal
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heals
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 it from the
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effect
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effects
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 of harmful
gases
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Moreover
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, the fossil fuels are non-renewable and green
energy
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 is renewable
which
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, which
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 has have big impact on the environment. The hydrocarbons are
priduced
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produced
 from the ancient trees and human bodies, which is a long process and
pollut
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pollutes
 the soil
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however
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however,
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 sustainable energies
produce
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are produced
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 from natural sources like
sun
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the sun
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 and wind
which
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, which
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doesnot
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does not
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effect
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affect
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 nature.
On the other hand
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, the negative
effect
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 of
this
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 development is that it is
cost effective
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cost-effective
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. To explain, the installation of solar panels is
fortune
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fortunate
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and
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, and
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 it
it
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is
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 not possible for every individual to
instal
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install
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.
Also
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, the maintenance of these panels is not a cup of tea for everyone.
Additionally
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, wind panels could be installed in large areas. These are the negative
effectos
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effects
 of the growth.
To conclude
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, there are numerous optimistic
affect
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effects
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 of the establishment
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such
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, such
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 as
decrease
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a decrease
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air
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in air
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 pollution and
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effect
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an effect
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 on
green house
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greenhouse
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gases
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 sustainable
energy
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doesnot
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does not
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effect
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affect
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 soil.
Whereas
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 the negative effects cannot be ignored
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such
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, such
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 as the
installation
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cost
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 of
it
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installing it
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 is cost fortune.
Thus
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, it has both positive and negative
impact
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impacts
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.

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task-response
Make your view clear in the opening sentence and restate it in the final paragraph.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph and give a reason or example for each.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar to avoid errors that blur meaning.
vocabulary
Use short, simple sentences to express ideas more clearly.
content
Add specific examples or facts to back up points about energy use and pollution.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
structure
There are some linking words to show contrast and order.
content
The topic of energy sources is clear throughout the essay.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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