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The world production output from Asia, Europe, and the rest of the world in different years.

The given bar graph illustrates the
manufacture
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manufacturing
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 of the world from
Asia
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, Europe and other countries
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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worldwide between 1840-2000. Looking
from
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at
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overall
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the overall
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 structure,
Asia
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 and Europe experienced a decline, with the exception of other countries
during
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, during
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 the given time frame. In the preliminary period,
Asia
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witnessed in
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held
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 the highest position,
while
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 in the ultimate period, it showed a decrease. Moving onto the remaining statistics, the rate of production in
Asia
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which
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, which
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 accounted for 50% in 1840,
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while
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apply
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it
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apply
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fluctuated sharply and stood 45% in 2000. European countries obtained the highest points
being
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, being
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 40%, 30%, 25% and ultimately remained 45% in 2000. In terms of
rest
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the rest
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 of the world,
initially
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 rated 10% in 1840,
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however
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however,
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 it started to rise to 30% in 1880,
then
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 it had declined
20
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to 20
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%. In the final
period
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period,
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 it indicated a growth,
it stopped
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reaching
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 45% in 2000.

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content
You try to state a main view and use numbers.
structure
There is an attempt to describe changes over time.
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