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The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart gives information about the revenues that come from selling gold in Dubai, UAE, in the year 2002. The currency used here is dirhams.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 gold had the highest sales in March,
while
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 the lowest were in September and July. At the beginning of the period, in January, the income was 200
million
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, and it rose by around 30
million
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 in February. The number increased even more in March, reaching 350
million
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, showing that people bought the most at that time. Unfortunately, it decreased to 250
million
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 in April, and it dropped
further
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 in May by 50
million
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. During the timeline, in June, it was near 160
million
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; luckily, it extended to 210
million
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 in August. Surprisingly, July and September shared the same amount. As for the following months, October, November, and December, the three of them were all close in earnings, but they were under 200
million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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