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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts compare the percentage of how people in
Canada
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 and
Australia
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are
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have
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 access to the news among five different ways (TV, radio, online, print, and
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way
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).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the TV and online categories account for the largest proportions in both countries,
whereas
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the not-specified
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way
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category
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 represents the smallest share. The TV
way
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 accounts for 40% in
Canada
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, which is slightly higher than
Australia
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, at only 37%.
In contrast
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, Australian people prefer to use online
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way
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apply
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more than half of the
total
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time
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,
while
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 in
Canada
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 represents
at
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apply
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36%. As for
print
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the print
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 category, which records
for
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14% in
Canada
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,
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it is
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 half in
Australia
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. Both radio and not-specified ways are the least popular with both nations,
in
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Australia
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represents
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representing
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at
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approximately 2% each, compared to
Canada
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 shows 7% and 3% respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, australia, way with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 3 times.
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