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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.

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the number of
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 that closed and the number of new
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 that opened in one country during the period from 2011 to 2018.
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 closures and openings exhibited different trends over the given period, all of them followed a downward trajectory.
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, the rates of decline varied among them. As the graph shows,
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dropped rapidly from 8500 to around 4000
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on
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 2012. Followed by
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considerably
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 2014,
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 it slightly decreased to 3000
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 openings
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 2018.
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, the rates of
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 closures
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 slowly increasing until 2013, before
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 dramatically declined to almost 1000
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 2015.
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 the same year, the
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 closures rose significantly to just above 5000
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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