The charts below show the use of water for agriculture products in the Australia in 2004 and values of these products to the Australian economy in the same year.

The given charts demonstrate the amount of
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utilised in agricultural purposes and the income of those harvests in Australia, 2004
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, livestock was dominant among other sectors
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vegetables showed the lowest percentages. Most of the money came from cultivating fruits for the inhabitants of Australia
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allocated to the livestock constituted 36%. Whilst dairy and cotton represented a marginal rate with 4% difference, 19% and 15%, respectively. Tons of
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was
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surfed
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on
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fruit and sugar, depicting
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10% and 11% with a slight dissimilarity. Vegetables were watered much less than other sectors , and rice
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required less
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, 4% and 5%.
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, fruit contributed to the financial position of the Australian people much more than other plants, representing 44%. The second one is diary with 24%.
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a significant amount of
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is spent on livestock, the profit was quite less, 6%.
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, cotton showed 13%. The rice ,
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, represented only 1%. Sugar and vegetables were relatively low, 7% and 5%, respectively

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