The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart illustrate the relationship between age and crime,
as well as
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the types of
crimes
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commited
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committed
in the UK
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last
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year.
Overall
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, the line graph gives the information about
crime
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the crime
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rate in ages 0 to 60, with age on
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the x-axys
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x-axys
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x-axis
and
number
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the number
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of
crimes
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(tens of thousands) on
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y-axys
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y-axis
.
Moreover
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,
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the pie
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chart shows the percentage of different types of
crimes
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commited
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committed
. In more detail,
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most
crimes
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were
done
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in the age group from 12 to 28 years. The peak was for
20 year olds
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20-year-olds
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, standing at 80 thousand
crimes
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in the UK. Ages 16 and 24
also
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had a high crime rate, 70 and 60 thousand, respectively.
On the other hand
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, no
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were
commited
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committed
in the ages 0, 4 and 8.
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,
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violent
crimes
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made up
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almost
half of the chart, a
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46%. Drug and property
crimes
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were
also
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popular in the UK ( 22% of drug and 23% of property
crimes
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).
However
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, public order
crimes
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were the smallest segment, at a relatively low level of 9%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, moreover".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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