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Band 4

You have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that was booked by the organiser of a company meeting. Write a letter to the organiser of the meeting and include •Details about the meeting •The problem you face •What should be done

Dear Sir, I am writing to express my concern regarding the
accomodation
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accommodation
 you booked for the stay for the company extension meeting, which was held
on
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last
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 Saturday. There are numerous problems
i
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 faced
while
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 living at that place. Despite
of
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dirty bedsheets,
washroom
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the washroom
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 taps were
also
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 not running properly. I had to wait for about
a
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an
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 hour to take a shower.
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, there was no effective light system.
Lights
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 were so dim that
i
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I
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 was finding it
stringent
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difficult
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 to prepare for the meeting. Charging pods were
also
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 damaged,
i
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I
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 had to go to the main hall to charge my phone.
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Further
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Further,
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 employees can
also
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 face the same problem. So from my perspective,
company
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the company
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 should change the accommodation. Several
high rating
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high-rated
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hotel
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hotels
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 are nearby, which can be booked for upcoming meetings and events. I hope you find my letter well and
would
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will
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 take some consideration
to
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 the matter. Thankyou.

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task response
Improve task response by adding exact details of the meeting (date, place, and the aim) and state what you want the organiser to do (refund, changes, or offer new hotel.
coherence
Improve coherence by making small parts fit together and use clear links; use one idea per paragraph and start a new paragraph for each issue.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling; fix common mistakes like 'an hour', 'accommodation', and 'Thank you'.
tone
Keep a calm and formal tone; avoid too much slang or casual words.
content
Be clear on how the issue hurts your work and what exact action you want to be done, and add a time frame.
call to action
End with a clear call to action and a deadline for a response.
task response
Clear aim to tell the organizer of the problem and ask for a change.
structure
The letter has the right form: greeting and closing, which fits the task.
content
Facts of the issue are listed and a fix is suggested.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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