(Bar Chart) The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day

The charts give information about the percentage of males and

females

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engaged in household work and how long they spend on each

work

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task

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for

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one

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day.

Overall

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, the household work consisted of four main areas,

such

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as cooking, cleaning, pet care and house repairs. Look at

Firstly

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, the percentage of women is higher than men.

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females

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are engaged

the

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in cleaning the house more than males.

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, the same variations were observed in the average amount of time spent between them. The men were in cooking and cleaning

less

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than women. The percentage of some of the domestic works was equal between genders, 20

percent

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per cent

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for

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the

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pet care. And they are spending the same time on

this

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domestic responsibility, more clearly on the pet care

Punctuation problem

, 20

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minutes per day.

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, the house repair duties were lower among males than among

females

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. Approximately,

females

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do not spend much time on

this

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Dec 18, 2025

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Vocabulary: Replace the words females with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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152 words

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