(Bar Chart) The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day

The charts give information about the percentage of males and
females
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engaged in household work and how long they spend on each
work
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task
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for
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in
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one
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a
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day.
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, the household work consisted of four main areas,
such
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as cooking, cleaning, pet care and house repairs. Look at
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, the percentage of women is higher than men.
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,
females
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are engaged
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in cleaning the house more than males.
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, the same variations were observed in the average amount of time spent between them. The men were in cooking and cleaning
less
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than women. The percentage of some of the domestic works was equal between genders, 20
percent
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per cent
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on
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the
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pet care. And they are spending the same time on
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domestic responsibility, more clearly on the pet care
20
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, 20
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minutes per day.
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, the house repair duties were lower among males than among
females
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. Approximately,
females
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do not spend much time on
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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