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Band 4.5

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that
employee
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employees
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 work more and
recive
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receive
less
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fewer
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days
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 off, and they should have
shorter
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a shorter
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 working
week
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,
while
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weekend
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the weekend
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 should be longer. From my perspective, I firmly agree that
workers
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shuold
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should
 have a shorter working
week
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.
Although
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 more
working-
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working days
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days
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experiecned
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experienced
 to be beneficial for many companies. To illustrate, these companies force
employee
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employees
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 to work six
days
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 a
week
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 to enhance
the
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apply
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productivity in order to increase
the seals
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sales
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.
For instance
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, many local
resurants
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restaurants
 offer part-time
job
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jobs
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, which
is
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are
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essential
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essential,
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 not
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optional
optinal
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optinal,
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 for their
workers
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, to
serive
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serve
 the
costumers
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customers
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.
However
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, many
wroking
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working
days
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 seem to be very damaging
on
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to
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workers
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workers'
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 health because they do not have
enagh
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enough
 time to recharge their energy and get ready for the next
week
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.
As a
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result
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result,
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 it can
be
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have
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harmful
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a harmful
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 effect in the long run.
Moreover
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, a lot of
adults
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adult
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workers
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 argue that
weekend
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the weekend
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 should be longer because
the
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apply
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free time
help
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helps
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 them improve their hopes and
relaxe
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relax
. When individuals have one or two
days
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 off,
it
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they
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goes
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use
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 to
restarted
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restart
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 for the next
week
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such
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, such
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 as
clean
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cleaning
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 their
cloths
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clothes
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 or bay food from the
supurmarket
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supermarket
.
By comparison
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, if they have
longer
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a longer
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 weekend, they could do some
hopes its
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hobbies
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 like them, or even take a short trip to
relaxe
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relax
 in the wildlife and explore the local nature
which
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, which
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 they can enjoy during these
days
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 off and come back
towork
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to work
 with
posetive
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positive
 energy. In conclusion, I would argue that
long
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a long
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 working
week
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seem
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seems
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 good for firms, the beneficial impact on
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workers
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workers'
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 health
tend
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tends
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 to be more vital.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro that states your view. Then two body paragraphs: one on why a shorter week is good; one on why a longer weekend is good. Finish with a short conclusion that restates your view.
coherence
Link ideas clearly. Use simple linking words to join sentences and ideas.
language
Fix spelling and errors. Use simple words and check common mistakes like week vs weekend, their vs there.
content
Give more details or facts to back up points.
content
Clear stance and basic structure.
content
Shows health and rest ideas.
coherence
Offers examples to support view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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