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The three graphs below show the value of Australia’s trade (in Australian dollars) with China, Japan, and the United States between 2004 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The three graphs compare the amount of Australian
trade
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 with three different nations (China, Japan, and the US) in Australian dollars between 2004 and 2009.
Overall
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,
trade
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 varied among the three countries.
While
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 exports to China and Japan exceeded imports, the United States exhibited the opposite trend. In 2004, the Australian trading market with China experienced a steady increase, with exports being just over 10
billion
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AUD
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 and imports starting below 20
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AUD
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, until the middle of 2008,
where
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 exports exceeded imports by 5
billion
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AUD
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, reaching around 35
billion
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AUD
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at the end
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 of the period. Meanwhile, in Japan, the
trade
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in
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remained relatively stable, roughly at 20
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AUD
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 throughout the period.
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, the
trade
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 out showed more variation in value, as it rose gradually from about 20
billion
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AUD
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,
then
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 stayed constant until 2007, where it increased sharply, peaking at close to 40
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AUD
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, before falling substantially to around 30
billion
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AUD
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 in 2009.
On the other hand
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, the value of
trade
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 with the United States remained at the same level throughout the given period for both types. The amount
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 from abroad stayed just over 20
billion
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AUD
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,
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 the goods sent abroad hovered around 10
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AUD
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, despite some increase in 2008

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trade, billion, aud with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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