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The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The
chart
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 below shows the number of
girls
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 per 100
boys
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 enrolled in different levels of school
education
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.
the
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 target is the green line 100
boys
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, the blue
chart
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 is 1990
and
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red
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the red
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chart
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 is 1998
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first
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first,
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 the
chart
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show
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shows
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 the primary
education
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 , developing
countrie
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countries
 at
1990
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1990,
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 the primary
education
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 was 83
girls
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 and
at
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in
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 1998 was 87
girls
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also
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also,
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at
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in
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 developed
countries
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at
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, at
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 1990 was 95
girls
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 and in
1998
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1998,
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is
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it was
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 96
girls
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 per 100
boy
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boys
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 at secondary
education
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 developing and developed
countries
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 at 1990 in developing was 72 girsl per 100
boys
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 and at 1998 82
girls
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 , developed
countries
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 at 1990 was 98 and at 1998 was 99
girls
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 tertiary
education
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 in developing
countries
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 66 at 1990 and developed 75 at 1998 , in developing 105 at 1990
girls
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 and developed 112 at 1998
girls
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 inrease the target of
boys
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 and the developed
countries
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 are surpassed the target 100 at tertiary eduction

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, girls, boys, education, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • number
  • girls
  • boys
  • enrolled
  • education
  • primary
  • secondary
  • higher
  • ratio
  • indicate
  • barriers
  • accessible
  • significant
  • decline
  • pursuing
  • features
  • comparisons
  • gender
  • equality
  • societal
  • norms
  • progress
  • issues
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