The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar
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shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.
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, the
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shows INDIA have three charts.
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one previously, in 1950, it was 15% and
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in 2002, around 17%
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, in the future , in 2050, around 18% of the total world population .
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shows CHINA in 1950, it
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had
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the highest total word
population
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population,
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is
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which was
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around 23% and
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in 2002, it was 20% and in the future might be 20% in 2050
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shows was low in the USA first
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in 1950, it was around 7% and in 2002it was 5 , and in 2050, it might be the same percentage
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shows
JAPAN
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Japan as
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the lowest country in the
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first
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1950,
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when it
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was around 4% and in 2002, it was 3%. In 2050 might be 2% To summarise the information highest exactly in 1950 percentage is
China
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in China
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and, and the lowest is
Japan
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in Japan
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exactly
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apply
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in 2050

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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