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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the
percentage
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 of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.
Firstly
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 , they have four countries
the
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, the
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 first one is India
,
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.
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 the first chart is
1950
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1950,
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 the
percentage
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 of
india
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India
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it
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apply
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was 15% , and in
2002
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2002,
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 it was about 17% ,
might
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which might
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 happen in the
futur
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future
about
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, about
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 18% .
Secondly
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 , the highest
countrie
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country
 is China
in
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. In
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1950
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1950,
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 the population in China
its
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apply
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was about 23% and in
2002
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2002,
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its
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it
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 was 20% but in 2050 in the futur probably
is
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it will be
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 15%.
Thirdly
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 , in
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the Usa
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Usa
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USA
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 it was 7% , and in 2002 it was 5% , probably it
be
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will be
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 the same
percentage
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 in the future in 2050
Finally
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 , in
Japan
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Japan,
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 it's the lowest
percentage
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,
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;
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 in
1950
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1950,
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its
Correct pronoun usage
it
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 was 4% , and in
2002
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2002,
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its
Correct pronoun usage
it
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 was 3% and
possible
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possibly
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 in the
Correct your spelling
future
futur
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futur,
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 it
come
Verb problem
will come
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more
Rephrase
even
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lowest
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lower
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 to 1%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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