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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.

The two pie
charts
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 illustrate the total
energy
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consumption
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 and
electricity
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generation
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 used during
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the last
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 year. Units are measured in percentage. In general, it is clearly seen that Oil was the biggest segment for
the
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energy
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consumption
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.
Altgough
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Although
, for world
electricity
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generation
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, coal made up the biggest part.
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,
other
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 was the least significant part of
both
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charts
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. In more detail, coal was a big part of
both
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charts
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, but for
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electricity
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 it was slightly bigger-39.8% and 25.1%, respectively.
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, oil covered the proportion of 34.3% in the total world
energy
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consumption
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, but,
on the other hand
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, in
electricity
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generation
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 it was visibly less significant-only 6.7%. For
both
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pie's
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, gas covered around one-fifth of the
energy
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 and
eletricity
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electricity
 used in the given year.
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, combustible renewables & waste only appeared in
energy
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consumption
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, standing at around one-tenth.
Other
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 was a very small figure in
both
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charts
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 (0.4% for
energy
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 and 2.1% for
electricity
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).
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, nuclear and hydro were used a lot more in
electricity
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generation
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,
thus
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,
both
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 standing at about 16% in
electricity
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 and below 10% in
energy
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charts, energy, consumption, electricity, generation, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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