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The world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or the same conditions of work for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work

In my opinion, people can change their jobs or responsibilities for something new. If you work at one job,
it's
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you're
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 just going to lose any sense. At first ,
which
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when
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 trying to choose a job,
want
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I want
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 it to be interesting and exciting, not only well paid. First of all, when a person works on one
work
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job
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 almost their whole life, it can’t give a fascination.
Secondly
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,
this
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 person can prefer something else. As an example, a man works in an office with lots of paperwork. Sooner or later ,
this
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 job will annoy him , and his heart wants to try something new, especially since childhood. I mean,
this
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 man could have preferred in his childhood a deal with animals.
Then
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 why can’t he try to work with them and forget about his profession with documents?
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, if you want to try something new and interesting, but can’t find it with good payment or a spot.

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structure
Start with a short, clear intro that states your view. Then give one idea per paragraph and end with a brief summary.
content
Give one clear idea for each point and add a simple example to back it up.
cohesion
Use simple linking words to show order and to connect ideas.
grammar
Check grammar, especially verb forms and subject‑verb agreement, and keep sentences short.
task
Stick to the task: discuss why work changes happen and how to get ready for work, and keep to the topic.
content
There is an attempt to discuss change in work and a possible example.
content
The essay shows a view and a sense of purpose.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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