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the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant

The pie charts below illustrate the different
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purposes
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 of
water
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usage
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proportion
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proportions
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 in six areas worldwide.
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, it is readily apparent that
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Africa
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 and
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Asia
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 are the two continents which mainly
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water
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 for agriculture. The proportion of industrial
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 of
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 took roughly half of total
water
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usage
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 in both North America and Europe.
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, agriculture consisted of approximately 35
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,
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 the domestic
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 was less than a fifth of total
water
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usage
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. As for South America,
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 is largely used for agriculture at 71
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,
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 both the industrial and domestic
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 only occupied a third of the total proportion. Meanwhile,
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Africa, Central Asia, and Southeast Asia show similar proportions in
water
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usage
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. The agricultural category is significantly higher than the other categories, with more than 80
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 in these three areas, leaving only less than a quarter for both domestic and industrial
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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