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The chart below gives information about the average annual pay of doctors and other workers in seven different countries in 2004.

The bar chart illustrates data about the average annual income of clinicians and other employees in seven
various
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apply
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regions in 2004. Looking
from
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at
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overall
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the overall
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 structure, the doctors’ salary is in the highest position
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whereas
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, whereas
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 other workers experienced a decline during the time frame in all given countries. Moving onto the remaining statistics, the rate of salary which accounted for almost
150 000$
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$150,000
 for doctors in
US
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the US
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,
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 Germany, Switzerland and Canada were
also
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 top payers which paid close 110 000$,
while
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 France,Finland and
Czech
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the Czech
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 Republic amounted to between
40 000
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$40,000
-
80 000$
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$80,000
 in the given time frame. In terms of money given to other workers was
42 000$
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42,000$
 in the US and Switzerland
,
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however
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however,
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 other countries, namely Germany, France, Finland and
Canada
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Canada,
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 compensate
30 000$
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30,000$
 in a year. Employees in the Czech Republic earn 15 000$ which was the lowest among other countries.

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