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Band 5.5

You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you have been working. In your letter describe the work you have been doing explain why you can no longer do this work recommend another person who is interested in the work

Dear Manager, I hope you are doing well. My name is Harnish, and I am working at your organisation. I am writing to inform you that I will not be able to continue the
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. The
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 that I have been doing at your organisation includes collecting trash from the neighbourhood.
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 been assisting the administrative staff with organising the yearly events because they have been struggling with excessive
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. I had a great time serving your corporation and learning from the best.
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, I am preparing for the civil services exam, and I want to spend all my time
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 its preparation.
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 preparation will demand all of my focus as it is one of the toughest
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 I will not be available to contribute to your mission even if I wish to. I truly believe that you are doing
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God's
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 and want to extend my help. I have a personal suggestion
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 my friend whose name is Raj, and he is interested
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 a part of your team. He is 25 years old and previously
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 worked as a volunteer three times. I am happy to send him to meet you next week on Monday if you are available. Thank you so much for your time, and I look forward to hearing from you soon. Best Regards, Harnish

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structure
Make the plan before you write: first tell who you are, then say what you did, why you stop, and who can help next.
coherence
Use one idea in each paragraph. Keep the line clear and short.
tone
Be kind and polite in tone. Use formal words, and avoid big and new words.
language
Check small mistakes like spell and form. For example, 'organisation' is better than 'corporation'.
content
You tell what you did and the reason you stop.
actionability
You give a friend to help next.
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