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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given pie charts show the percentage of different nutrients an average individual in the USA uses in their everyday meals, including
snacks
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Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the amount of saturated fat and
sodium
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 is very high in dinner meals.
Whereas
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, the added sugar in
snacks
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 of the USA
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 a considerable amount, and it doesn't appear much in dinners compared to
sodium
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 and saturated fat.
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, as it is observed, there is 29%
sodium
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 in lunch consumed in America, and breakfast sits at 14%, making it identical to the percentage of
sodium
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 in
snacks
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.
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, the degree of saturated fat in both breakfasts and
snacks
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 is mildly higher, and is about 16% and 21%. As for lunch, it is apparent that saturated fat appears for 26%. To end with, the added sugar for lunch is 19% for the consumption of an average person in the USA.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words snacks, sodium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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