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Band 4

A survey conducted for the places in which people gain access to the Internet from 1998 to 2004.

The bar chart shows the percentage of
people
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 using the
Internet
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 in 4 different locations between 1998 and 2004.
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, the proportion of users connecting to the
Internet
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 at home and libraries saw a slight increase,
while
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 the data for accessing at work and college decreased.
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, the home was the most common place for
people
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 to access the
Internet
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 for 6 years. Over the 1998-2004 period, the number of
people
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 using the
Internet
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 at home fluctuated.
This
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 figure fell steadily from 1998 to 2000 but grew after that, reaching the highest level of the total at about 55% in 2004. Meanwhile, the percentage of users accessing the
Internet
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 at work remained constant at over 25% between 1998 and 2000 before decreasing sharply to over 10% in the
last
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 year. From 1998 to 2002, the college saw a
stabilization
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 in the number of
people
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 connecting to the
Internet
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, at exactly 20%,
then
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this
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 data slowly dropped to over 15%.
In contrast
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, there was a recovery in the proportion of
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 users in the library, increasing from 10% to approximately 15% in the 6-year period.

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structure
Add a short intro that restates the chart and a clear end that sums the trends.
data
Give exact numbers for each year for all four places, so the view is clear and true.
paragraphing
Write in 2-3 clear paragraphs. Put one place in each paragraph and use phrases to show a point, like 'for example' or 'in addition'.
linking
Use simple linking words to show change and contrast, such as 'but', 'while', 'then', and 'as' when needed.
accuracy
Be careful with facts that are not clear, and keep a steady tense when you talk about the chart.
overview
The writing keeps an overall view of the chart.
content
The text shows a trend, like more use at home and a drop at work.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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