The graph shows the percentage of visiting the cinema once a month or more between 1984 to 2003 (4 age groups) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the data on seeing the theatre for one month or more from 1984 to 2003 by four age groups. In overview, the young generation data has been fluctuating throughout the period,
while
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the elderly people were less
intrested
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interested
watch
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in watching
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movie
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movies
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in the cinema.
It is clear that
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on the graph, in 1984, under 15 to 24 had a ratio for visiting the cinema was around 17%, but after that, it increased gradually in 1992,
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it reached a peak
approximetaly
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approximately
55%.
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, the starting point for adults for the movie was 10%,
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it varied from 1992 to 2003, and climbed to nearly 40%. In the 25-35
, the
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age group, the
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proportion of customers at the beginning was estimated
4
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at 4
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% only, but after that it rose
25
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to 25
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% in the middle of 1996 to 2000, and
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slightly decreased by 4%,
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it experienced
zig-zagged
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a zig-zag
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in three years.
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, a very small number of middle-aged people went to the cinema in 1984.
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, the number of individuals has been increasing from 2000 to 2003, which accounted for above 10%.

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