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The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about how many young individuals get
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education
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an education
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 at university in four distinct countries(A,
B
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,
C
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, and D) in the
years
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 2000,2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be observed that citizens who live in
Country
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 A and D prefer
studiying
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studying
 in recent
years
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,
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however
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however,
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 in
Country
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B
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 and
C
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 the
intrests
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interests
for
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in
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 getting
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education
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an education
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on
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among
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students
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 showed fluctuations. When looking at the bar chart at first
glance
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glance,
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 it is observed that adolescents
favor
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favour
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continue
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continuing
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 their
education
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 in
higer
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higher
education
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 in
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country
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countries
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 A and D in 2010,with the figures of 62% and 80% respectively.
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 in
the
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apply
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country
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A
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A,
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indicates
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the percentages
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 for 2000 and 2005
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years
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apply
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were 38% and 52%, in
country
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 D
they
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, they
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 were higher compared to
country
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 A(64% and 78%). With regard to the percentage of young individuals in
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country
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countries
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B
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 and
C
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 in 2000, they showed the same performance with 46
percent
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per cent
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.Following five
years
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,in
country
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B
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 the
enthuasiasm
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enthusiasm
 for
education
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was
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had
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 declined a little bit(41%), but in 2010 it was easy to see an increase among
students
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 with 43%.In
country
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C
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, in 2000, only 46% of
students
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 were
intrested
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interested
 in
educated
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educating
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 themselves,
whereas
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 after five
and
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years and
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 even
then
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years
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 52% of
students
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 enjoyed keep going their
education
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 in
high
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higher
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education
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centers
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centres
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, b, c, years, country, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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