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The line graph shows the proportion of coffee made in three different countries from 1990 with predictions to 2030

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of three countries which were engaged in making
coffee
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 during the period from 1990 to 2030.
Overall
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, Korea had sharp fluctuations in the percentage of
coffee
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 production. Japan didn’t peak as much with mass production as Korea did.
However
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, India
at the end
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 of the period overtook the other 2 regions, and got its upward trend. The two countries , Japan and Korea, started with quite a large proportion of caffeine, and they had a 10 ratio difference. In 2005, these two regions had the same percentage of caffeine , about 90.
Nevertheless
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, after 5 years, Korea`s proportion of
coffee
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 increased to 115 , but occasionally in the coming years it slowly dropped ,
as well as
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 Japan`s production
On the other hand
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, India began from zero, but from time to time it went higher.In 2010, its share of
coffee
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 was 70 , the same as Japan.
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, India quickly grew and reached a peak in 2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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