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The line graph shows the proportion of exports by Australia to 4 different countries between 1990 and 2012.

The line graph shows the proportion of
exports
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 by Australia to 4 different countries between 1990 and 2012.
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, the percentage of
Australian
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exports
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 to
China
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 and India increased from the starting point,
while
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 the reverse is true for
remaining
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the remaining
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 countries
including
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, including
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Japan
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 and
USA
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the USA
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. It is
also
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 evident that despite
Japan
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 being a dominant country in the initial
year
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year,
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 it dropped across the period,
whereas
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 the
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 for
China
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 started with somewhat smaller shares,
it
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and it
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 showed a dramatic
increase
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at the end
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 of the period. Focusing first on increases, approximately 2% of
Australian
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exports
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was
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were
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 for
China
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, slightly more than the
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 for India, constituting 1%.
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,
this
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 disparity became even more pronounced in the next years, as the former
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 rose noticeably to 11%,
the
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while the
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 latter had a marginal
increase
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 to around 3% in 2005.
Australian
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exports
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 to
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china
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China
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 witnessed a dramatic
increase
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 in 2012, reaching approximately 29%, but
this
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figure
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for
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was lower for India, representing around 6%, after a slight dip. When it comes to
exports
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 for
Japan
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 and
USA
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the USA
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, the
figure
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 for
Japan
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 stood at 25%,
and
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apply
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this
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followed by a gradual drop to 17% until
2002
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2002,
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 when it saw an unnoticeable
increase
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, before finishing at 17%.
The
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A
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 similar trend can be seen in the
exports
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 to
USA
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the USA
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. Starting with around 11% in 1990, a
figure
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 that
then
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 dropped to 7% in 1995,
After
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after
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 an initial decrease
it
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, it
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 rose notably in 2000, reaching its peak of 12%. Share for Australia continued its downward trajectory, with the dip to around 6% in the final year, making it
less
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a less
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 dominant country for
Australian
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exports
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, australian, china, japan, figure, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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