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Social media has replaced the traditional method of communicating and people use more and more of social media to communicate and follow news and events. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

There is no denying the fact that
people
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 now tend to follow news and events on social
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, which has replaced the traditional method of communicating.
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 it is a commonly held belief that watching the news
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 social
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 is much easier than the traditional way, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I believe that it has more benefits.
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 with, social
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 has many benefits, and it makes our
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 much easier.
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, nowadays, we can see our relatives wherever we are, which is a significant change in the world.
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, when we want to know what is going on, we just need to open our phone and see everything.
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, many
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 outside their country want to know what is happening in their country, which social
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 provides. Another point to consider, social
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 makes our
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 much more productive in many areas,
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 as work, study, and health. It is
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 possible to say that we needed to focus on the teachers in the past;
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, now we do not need to
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 we can ask Chat GPT to give us the information.
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, we do not need to go to the doctor; we can just search on social
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, and it will help us.
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, many
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, when they feel something wrong in their body, just ask experts on the internet. In conclusion, despite
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 having different views, I believe that the advantages of social
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 outweigh the disadvantages.

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task response
Your view is clear, but you do not show the other side well. Add one paragraph that shows the bad side and how it could be kept in check.
coherence cohesion
Make a real plan. Each idea should be in its own path. Use a gate sentence to move from one idea to the next.
content
The essay ends with a clear view that advantages beat the bad side.
structure
There is a good set of link words and a simple form for each idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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