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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the previous years,
abortion
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becomes
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 a controversial topic
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due to
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 rapid growth. A population study shows
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 that it should be illegal,
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 others claim quite the opposite. Despite low support
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 the above statement, the majority of people do not advocate
abortion
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. Many argue that human
life
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 begins at conception, and should be legally protected, not bypassing the responsibility for
mother's
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 actions. To start with, it is considered that widespread access to
abortion
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 may weaken respect for human
life
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.
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, research has found that, availability of getting rid of humanity, which some individuals may disbelief,
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 their infertility, may begin to view human
life
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 as less valuable.
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,
this
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 makes it clear that
abortion
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 may be totally disqualified in the present moment.
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, many critics argue, that adoption provides a worth considering alternative to
abortion
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.
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, newborns have a chance to live,
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unavailability
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 of
abortion
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.
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, it positively affects both sides, which will not
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eliminate
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humanity ,
together with
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 respect
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 it. As
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 as I'm concerned,
abortion
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 may negatively affect the population, in terms of
humanity
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humanity's
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 decrease and its respect.
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, some critics find
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 that a beneficial alternative to
abortion
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 is adoption, meanwhile newborns have a chance to live
life
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 to the fullest. It is predicted
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 that
abortion
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 will not be available in the future, in spite of low advocacy of the
populance
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population
.

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structure
Plan first. Start with a short intro that says your view and what you will talk about.
coherence
Give one idea in each paragraph. Use clear linking words to join ideas.
content
Explain why each view is true with a simple example.
structure
Finish with a short end that restates your view.
language
Check for small grammar and spell mistakes. Keep simple words and short sentences.
structure
The essay shows two side ideas.
content
There is some use of example ideas for each side.
content
A line shows how life may be seen to start at conception.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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