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Writing Samples
Band 4

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Only governments and large companies can improve the environment
while
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 individuals can do
noting
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nothing
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 to it. I agree
if
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that if
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 the governments and the companies can fix the environment through certain policies,
while
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 I disagree with the statement that only
them
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they
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that
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apply
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can change it. On one hand, I do agree that the government and large organisations can prevent and improve the
animals
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animals'
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 habitat using their power and money.
Furthermore
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, the governments can easily
made
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make
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 a policy to forbid logging and
safe
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save
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 the
trees
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trees'
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 habitat or launch a new campaign to restore the broken territory by planting new trees. Meanwhile, big institutions can develop new innovations
such
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 as
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly
transportations
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transportation
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 or make a green energy reactor using their money.
Therefore
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, they
posses
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possess
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 a big role
on
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in
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 improving
earth
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Earth's
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lifes
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life
, from funding and policies that help
the
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apply
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nature.
On the other hand
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, individuals
are
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apply
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also
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having
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make
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 a contribution to
this
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. Every new
policies
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policy
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 always
come
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comes
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 from personal disagreement that
push
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pushes
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 the lawmaker to make an order. Sometimes, demonstrations about environmental damage led by small communities that
aware
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are aware
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about
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of
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 the consequences of damaging animal habitats.
Moreover
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, many nature movements are pioneered by society, not a big company that sometimes just
want
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wants
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 to
involved
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be involved
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 when the movements are already big enough
to
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for
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 them to take a profit from it. Here, the difference between the lawmaker and their people is
they
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that they
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 have the power to make and stop the damage,
while
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individual
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individuals
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 have the right to protest their government that
damaging
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is damaging
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 their beautiful nature.

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structure
Plan your answer. State your view in the intro and end with a short conclusion.
coherence
Make each paragraph hold one main idea. Use linking words to show how ideas go from one part to the next.
grammar
Use easy, clear grammar. Check mistakes like noting and their.
content
Give real examples or facts to back ideas, not only guesses.
vocabulary
Use common words. Keep phrases short and clear.
structure
You show a view and have two sides in the essay.
content
You note the role of both government and people.
coherence
There is some flow with two main ideas in the body.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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