Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation ?

In many countries throughout the world, young people are pushed into careers that they have no aptitude for
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or do not want to do, and there are two main reasons for
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situation. The first reason is
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of tertiary study options. In some countries,
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as China, there are limited places available for tertiary study, and those who do not manage to earn a place at the institution of their choice often find themselves studying a subject which does not interest them
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or which is a poor match for their skills and aptitudes. The other main reason, which is closely aligned to the former point, is parental aspirations. Many parents push their children into a limited set of career options because these choices represent social success, security and money in later life. In many cases, the skills and needs of the children are ignored, as their parents encourage them to earn places in prestigious, if inappropriate, institutions and to study subjects that are acceptable to their friends and extended family. Some of those children who do manage to jump through all the required hoops find that they are trapped in a career which does not suit their needs or abilities, and that they can see no escape from the life sentence imposed by
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family.
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can have both personal and social consequences.
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, unsatisfied workers can suffer from job stress, which drains human potential and may lead to physical and psychological illness. Dissatisfaction and distress
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their chosen profession and
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society as a whole, as unhappy and disaffected workers tend not to give their best, and
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affects the quality of their work. In conclusion, a person who is pushed into uncongenial work because of social constraints or family pressure is not likely to be a productive and happy member of society. We need to ensure that individual talents and skills are recognised and catered for if we are to have a harmonious and well-developed society.

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task
Add more real examples from more places, not only one country, to show this view to the reader.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a short sentence that shows the idea and then add details.
lexical
Use simple words. Some big words can make the meaning hard.
grammar
Check grammar. Watch long sentences and use proper punctuation.
task
Finish with a clear plan for change, not just a statement.
strength
Clear main ideas and a true view of the topic.
strength
Good set up with an intro, body, and ending.
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Use of sign words like firstly and finally to show order.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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