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You recently joined a gym. After a few weeks, you are unhappy with some aspects of the service. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter: explain when you joined the gym • describe the problems you are experiencing say what action you would like the manager to take

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter
,
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apply
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 to express
the
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my
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 dissatisfaction
about
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with
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 the inappropriate services of the
gym
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. On 26th December 2025, I enrolled
for
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on
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 the
gym
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. During the visit
of
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to
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mall
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the mall
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, I
have seen
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saw
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 a discount of 70%. As boxing day promotions were going on at that time. A counselling session was attended by me in the mall. Deals and Details were so
promising
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promising,
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 so I enrolled myself without wasting a moment.
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However
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 when I visited the
gym
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 in
real
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reality
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 after a day of joining, I
have
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witnessed there is a huge gap between promises and
actual
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the actual
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gym
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. The
gym
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 was
over crowded
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overcrowded
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, overcrowding of
individuals more
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more individuals
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 than
capacity
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the capacity
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.
In addition
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, hygiene was not taken care of, there was
huge
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a huge
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 pile of dust near the machines
and
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, and
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washrooms
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the washrooms
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does
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did
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 not have
the
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a
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 separate organic disposable bin. I would like to explore my options for the return of my membership
,
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.
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 I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
issue
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could issue
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 me a partial or full refund. Yours
Sincerely
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sincerely
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, Adam.

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structure
Put ideas into three clear parts: intro, problem, and request. Start with a short sentence about why you write.
structure
Put one idea in one paragraph. Short, simple sentences help.
tone
Use formal form for a letter. If you do not know the name, use 'Dear Sir or Madam' and end with 'Yours faithfully'.
content
Stick to facts. Date, place, and main problems only.
grammar
Watch verb tense. Tell past actions with the right form and stay consistent.
content
Clear goal to ask for a refund.
tone
Polite and formal opening and closing.
content
The letter mentions specific problems.
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