Some people believe that famous celebrities are poor role models for teenagers, while others think that they can be a source of inspiration. Discuss the advantages and Disadvantages of celebrities as role models for young people

Famous celebrities pose as
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models
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for
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think it is a good
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others think that celebrities can be bad
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models
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for
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, which in
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may cause them to use
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or commit crimes. So what are the
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and advantages of celebrity
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models
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? One major advantage is that
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models
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can positively impact
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' lives, which can help them achieve their goals or get motivation for other ideas.
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Noel. Noel is a gym influencer
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who faced a huge conundrum. When he was
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young,
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his dad abused alcohol and usually beat him and his mother up
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that was the motivation he needed to go to the gym. His motivation was to stop his dad from beating his mom. But he couldn't
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his revenge
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the fact
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father
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had died
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. And these days
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, Noel
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posts passionate content about going to the gym, how it helped him mentally and how it could help you too. obstacle Another benefit from
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models
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is that they can
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inspire your dreams and help you aim higher
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Cristiano Ronaldo. He is an extremely
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the fact that he was the best football player of all time. Even today
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he isn't in his
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he motivates young children to become the best football players
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them boost their dedication and love for football.
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there are
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major
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.
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models
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can be an extremely bad influence. They can motivate you to start
drugs
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and stop studying.
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a
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model
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not for being a good
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for being a bad one. On his
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streams,
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you can usually see him inviting a bunch of girls and saying how good his
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is for being so
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and having so many girls. But one of the bad things he does is that he promotes “looksmaxxing
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which basically means that you have to do anything in your power to have a more striking appearance, which a lot of
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these days struggle with and can help them feel like outcasts. But
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not the worst part. The worst part is that he promotes
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on his stream. You can see him going off camera and coming back “recharged
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which means that he snorted meth. And
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an extremely bad influence on young
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because they can lose their self-control and
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start doing
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. Another disadvantage is
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role
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models
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can promote hurtful or even
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life threatening
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trends, which can lead to
teenagers
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being badly hurt, injured for
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or even lead them to their death. A trend that was popular in the summer was called “train surfing
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like in the game “
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you had to surf trains. But as you can
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extremely dangerous and even
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life threatening
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while
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doing the trend
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, some
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young
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got
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life threatening
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injuries
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a couple even died.
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there are a couple of bad
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like
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models
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promoting
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and unreal standards
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there are
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a couple of advantages like helping
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models
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others emotionally or helping young
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aim higher. I think that both sides have valid arguments
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in my
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I think that the advantages outweigh the
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role model
  • celebrity
  • teenager
  • influence
  • inspiration
  • example
  • behavior
  • attitude
  • hard work
  • talent
  • success
  • charity
  • responsibility
  • media
  • image
  • reality
  • balance
  • critical thinking
  • guidance
  • peer pressure
  • privacy
  • fame
  • money
  • ethics
  • kindness
  • resilience
  • discipline
  • goal
  • study
  • sport
  • health
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