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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the admission of international
students
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 at three different universities.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
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University
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the University
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 of Riverview has the highest
number
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 of
students
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 enrolled.
Moreover
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, admission of indian
students
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are
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is
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 higher in
number
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 in all universities,
while
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students
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 from
Columbia
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Colombia
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 have a lower enrollment. Nepalese
students
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 are the second highest that admitted to these universities after India.
University
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 of Riverview accounts for around 8000
students
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 from India, just over 5000 from Nepal, nearly 4000 in Vietnam, approximately 2000 from Indonesia, and slightly under 2000 from Colombia.
Similarly
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, Smithtown
University
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 comes after
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University
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the University
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 of Riverview in the
number
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 of admissions of international
students
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, which has more
students
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 from India and Nepal and has precisely 6000 and 4000
students
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 respectively. Earlwood
University
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 has a lower
number
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 of student enrollments compared to the other two, which have around 5000 indian
students
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, just above 4000 Nepalese
students
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 around 3000
students
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 from Vietnam.
However
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,
Students
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 from Indonesia and Colombia account for a considerably lower
number
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 of admissions.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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