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The line graph differs the amount of nitrogen oxide by four types of vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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 line graph illustrates the
nitrogen
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oxide
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emissions
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 produced by
Buses
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, Lorries, Petrol
cars
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 and
diesel
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cars
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.
Overall
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, the line graph demonstrates that
Buses
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 were responsible for higher
nitrogen
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oxide
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emissions
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, whilst
diesel
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cars
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 were more environmentally friendly with fewer
emissions
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. Interestingly, the figure for Petrol and
diesel
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cars
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'
emissions
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 remained relatively low regardless of the speed of the vehicles.
To begin
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 with,
Buses
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 were generating roughly 40g/
km
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 of
nitrogen
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oxide
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while
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 driving at 10kph.
Emission
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 rates went down at a faster speed, and
Buses
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 recorded their lowest
emission
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 productions of around 30g/
km
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 at 60kph speed.
This
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 figure went up again as the bus crossed the speed limit of 70kph, reaching a peak of approximately 45g/
km
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 at 130kph.
Similarly
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, Lorries emitted just under 35g/
km
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 of
nitrogen
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oxide
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 at 10kph. As the Lorry started driving at a higher speed,
emission
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 rates were lessened to about 20g/
km
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.
However
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, once a Lorry crossed the 90kph mark,
emission
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 rates went up again.
On the other hand
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,
Diesel
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cars
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 contributed just over 5g/
km
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 of
nitrogen
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oxide
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emissions
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.
This
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 number remained the same regardless of their speed.
Furthermore
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, around 10g/
km
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 of
nitrogen
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 oxides are produced by petrol
cars
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 from 10kph to 130kph speed.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nitrogen, oxide, emissions, buses, cars, diesel, g, km, kph, emission with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions
  • nitrogen oxide
  • vehicle types
  • observed period
  • significant increase/decrease
  • emission levels
  • intersections
  • overtakes
  • largest/smallest emitter
  • conclude
  • overall trend
  • emission rankings
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