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Some people believe that governments should focus their educational investment on highly gifted students, while others argue that resources should be distributed equally among all learners. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 educational resources among students has lately developed into a controversial dilemma. The discussion about
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 topic leads to two different results, which one is that high achievers must be more invested
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, and the other one is that there should not be a difference between one student and another when
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 the course of learning. The idea of selecting those who are more likely to be successful in the future and giving them more opportunities is being held as a strong opinion for
people
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 who do not consider all
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 intellectual and worthy
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 the investment.
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, with
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 approach, those who score higher in their final exams will go to better universities and get better education, but those who could not work hard, no matter how worse their situation was,
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could not experience the same benefits. With all that being said, giving the right to each individual to learn and study in the same environment that every student in the whole country is, will give them a reason to fight and
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 all their excuses of not improving
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 the fact that
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 are improving rapidly in the same position and because they cannot blame the system anymore. In conclusion, giving equal support to every individual has its own pros and cons and could benefit or hurt some
people
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, but in my opinion,
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 giving the right to each student to learn in the same way that everyone else does sounds wonderful, it takes the opportunities from those who could achieve higher but they did not because they were not given a better platform to develop their knowledge.

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task
State your main view clearly in the first paragraph and restate it in the conclusion.
content
Give specific, real examples to back your points.
grammar
Avoid long, mixed sentences; use simple, short sentences.
coherence
Link ideas more clearly with simple connect words (first, then, also, however).
content
The essay shows two sides and gives a personal view.
coherence
There is an effort to link ideas with phrases like 'In conclusion'.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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