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The line graph shows changes in the amount of energy consumed in the United States from six different sources between 1980 and 2030, measured in quadrillion units.

The line graph demonstrates the
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energy consumption from 6 sources (
petrol
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 and
oil
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, coal, natural
gas
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, nuclear, solar/
wind
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 and
hydropower
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) in
U.S.
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 from 1980 to 2030.
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, nuclear, solar/
wind
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 and
hydropower
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 did not
experinece
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experience
 major fluctuations,
while
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petrol
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 and
oil
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, coal and natural
gas
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 slightly increased throughout the
period
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. From 1980 to
1995
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1995,
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petrol
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 and
oil
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changes
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changed
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 steadily. Before
2005
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2005,
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 they
incresed
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increased
 to 41
quadrillion
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units
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. Between 2005 and
2020
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2020,
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 they grew up a little to 43
quadrillion
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units
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. It is expected that by 2030, the consumption of
petrol
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 and
oil
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 will increase to 48
quadrillion
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units
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. Nuclear, solar/
wind
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 and
hydropower
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 started with the same figures
with
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, with
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 4
quadrillion
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units
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. Nuclear remained
steadily
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 over time. From 1990 to
2010
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2010,
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 solar/
wind
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 and
hydropower
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 showed gradual changes. Since
2010
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2010,
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 both of them remained unchanged until the end of
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period
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the period
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. Coal started with 16&nbsp
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quadrillion
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units
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 and was stable before 1990.
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 increased rapidly to 22
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1995. Between 1995 and
2005
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2005,
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 coal did not
experinece
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experience
 changes.
Since
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 2005
until
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 the end of
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period
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the period
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, it grew slightly
30
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by 30
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quadrillion
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units
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. Natural
gas
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 was 20
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980,
then
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 decreased
16
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to 16
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quadrillion
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units
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 in 1985. Before
1995
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1995,
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 it stayed stable. By
2000
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2000,
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 natural
gas
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incresed
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increased
 to 23
quadrillion
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units
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.
Then
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 again
feel
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fell
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 to 20
quadrillion
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units
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 in 2010. In
2015
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2015,
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 the amount of natural
gas
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 consumption was 25quadrillion
units
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and
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, and
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with
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this
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 figure
was
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remained
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similat
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similar
 until the
period
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol, oil, gas, wind, hydropower, period, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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