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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts
,
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 give the information
of
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 the
energy
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 produced in
Germany
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 and
France
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, respectively,
along with
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 the renewable resources used, in the year 2009.
Overall
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,
Germany
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 used
coventional
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conventional
energy
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 as their main source, with wind
energy
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 as
renewable
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,
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whereas
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France
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majorly
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 used nuclear
energy
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in addition
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hydroelctricity
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hydroelectricity
 as a renewable source. A major 59.6% of the total
energy
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 production of 560
Billion
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 kWh in
Germany
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 came from conventional thermal form, as opposed to
France
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, where 76% of 510
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 kWh electricity was generated from nuclear. The least
produce
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 came from renewables in
Germany
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 of about 17.4% and from conventional thermal
energy
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 of 10.3% in
France
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. As far as reusable sources are concerned, out of the total of 17.4% in
Germany
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, Biomass contributed the highest of 39.3%.
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, in
France
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, 80.5%
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13.7
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the 13.7
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% renewable
energy
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 was hydroelectricity. Both
Germany
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 and
France
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 got the least of their
energy
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made
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from solar
form
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forms
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, which accounted for 6.1% and 0.9%,
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accordingly
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respectively
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.
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, neither of them had any power generated from geothermal at all.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, germany, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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