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The diagrams below show the development of small fishing village its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort.

The given diagrams illustrate the transition of a small fishing
village
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 into a massive
european
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European
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 tourist resort between 1974 and 2004
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
village
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 experienced a significant development during the three decades.
In particular
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, the
village
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 faced enormous deforestation
while
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 being urbanised with modern utilities.
To begin
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 with, in 1974, there were noticeable green spaces
including
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, including
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forest
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a forest
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 area
in
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on
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 the western side of the
village
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 and
olive
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an olive
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 plantation
were
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was
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 placed in the central part. The fishing
village
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 population was 12,000
which
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, which
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 was situated close to the sea.
Addionally
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Additionally
, two other housing areas were constructed in the eastern and western
region
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regions
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 of the
village
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. By 2004, the
habour
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harbour
 was removed
and
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, and
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beach
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the beach
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 was renovated to increase its attractiveness.
Although
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 the fishing
village
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 remained
same
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the same
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 as in the initial year, new
tourists
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tourist
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 hotels were constructed near
to
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apply
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the beach area.
Additionally
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, the roads were developed to increase the transportation service. The forest area
were
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was
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 replaced by
golf
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a golf
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 course
and
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, and
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 olive
plantation
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plantations
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 were changed to a large farm. Interestingly, the animal farm
which
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, which
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 consisted of sheep and
goats
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goats,
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were
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was
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 removed by 2004.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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