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Band 5

You recently bought a piece of computer equipment but it was broken. You work at home and you need this equipment for your work. Write a letter to the shop manager. In this letter: • describe the problem with the equipment • explain how this problem is affecting your work • say what you would like the shop to do

Dear Manager, I am writing
this
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 email about my recent purchase of
Logitech
Correct article usage
a Logitech
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 Keyboard and
Mouse
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 set for my work computer. I ordered
this
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 set
on
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from
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 your shop a couple of days
before
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ago
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. It was out of stock first
but
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, but
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fortunately
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fortunately,
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 it got dispatched to me yesterday. When I opened the package, I found that right
click
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right-click
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 button of
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mouse
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the mouse
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 is broken. I work from home as an Accountant and
currently
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am currently
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 posting all the entries in
software
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the software
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. The software
need
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needs
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 more usage of
right click
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right-click
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. I already
give
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gave
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 away
old
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the old
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mouse
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 to my cousin. I am using the keyboard
instead
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 of
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mouse
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the mouse
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 for
right click
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right-click
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 options by using big formulas. It is so
time consuming
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time-consuming
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. I am requesting to change the
mouse
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with
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to
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new
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a new
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 one.
Also
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, I shall be very thankful to you
,
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apply
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 if you can give me a temporary one until
whole
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the whole
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 process of replacing takes place. Your faithful, Harman

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structure
Split the text into short, clear parts. Put one idea in each paragraph.
tone
Use a proper closing. 'Yours faithfully' or 'Yours sincerely'.
content
Be clear on what you want. State the replacement and a possible temp option.
grammar
Fix small grammar and use short, simple sentences.
lexis
Keep the words simple and easy to read.
content
The letter states the problem clearly.
tone
The tone is polite.
content
The request to replace is there.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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