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Writing Samples
Band 5

Write a letter to you friend to ask for help with collecting money for a charity organisation.

Dear qwe, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to request
to
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apply
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you
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your
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 help with collecting money for the charity event
helding
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being held
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 in our town. You know I am
organizing
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organising
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charity
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a charity
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 event for
heathcare
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healthcare
 and
children
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children's
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 education. As you know,
lot
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a lot
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 of children cannot get a chance to join a school
due to
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 their financial status. I see
old
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that old
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 people cannot get their medical treatment because they can’t afford it. So, I decided to take
this
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 initiative to help those people. I have generated a QR code to collect money
and
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, and
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 I can accept cash as well. I posted all the instructions on my social media profile. You can
also
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 see the instructions
and
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, and
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 if you can post on your
account
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account,
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 that would be great. I request you to
if
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apply
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you
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apply
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can
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apply
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help me
to
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apply
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collect money. So, we all help the needy people. You can
also
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 contact your near and dear ones to help
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this
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with this
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 event. Any help would be really appreciated. Thank you.
Your’s
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Yours
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 truly,

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structure
Plan each part. Put one idea in one paragraph.
task
Be clear on what you want the reader to do next.
tone
Use a good opening and a proper close.
grammar
Use short and easy words. Avoid long sentences.
editing
Check for spelling and small mistakes.
clarity
You tell what you want and how to help.
content
You give ways to give money (QR code and cash).
tone
You ask the friend to share with others.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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