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Completing university is thought be syme to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and dveloping soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction
there
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There
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 is no denying the fact that
the
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apply
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employments
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employment
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 is
essential
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an essential
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 thing in our modern life. Some people think that the university is the best way to get
good
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a good
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jop
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job
,
while
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 there is an argument that
say
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says
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skills
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 and experience
is
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are
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 more important.
This
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 essay will
analyes
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analyse
this
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 topic from both aspects and give my point of
veiw
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view
.
Body paragraph 1
On one hand, the university is the
easyest
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easiest
 method to be in a good position. To exemplify, most
of
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people study in the university to get
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a perfict
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perfict jop
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perfect job
.
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, my brother
graduate
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graduated
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 from KSU
and
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, and
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 he
get jop
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got a job
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 with a high salary.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, some
of
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apply
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people think that soft
skills
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 and experience
is
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are
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 more crucial than studying
,
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.
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, there is a study
provides
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that provides
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 data about the fraction of
the
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apply
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workers in a big company that the most of emploeeys have
the
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apply
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somft
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soft
skills
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 and experience.
Conclusion
In conclusion, there is no easy answer to that. On balance, in my
opinion
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opinion,
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i
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I
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 think that completing your
studyes
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studies
 and
enhance
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enhancing
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 your
skills
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 are two things
complet
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that complement
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 each other.

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language
Fix spelling and word form errors to make the text clear.
structure
Make a clear view at the start and restate it at the end.
content
Give one or two well chosen facts or numbers to back points.
coherence
Connect ideas with smooth link words to show how they fit together.
language
Use short, easy to read sentences with simple words.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the question.
content
There is a clear view that you have a balanced point.
language
You use examples to show a point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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