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Band 5

You have rented a house by a lake for the summer. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •describe the house •describe how you are spending your time there •invite your friend to come and visit Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Samira, Hope you're doing well! I am writing
this
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 letter to share
an
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some
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 exciting news with you
,
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.
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 I recently rented a house for summer vacation
and
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, and
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interesting
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the interesting
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 thing is
it
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that it
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 is
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besides
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beside
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 a beautiful lake. It is a 3BHK place
so
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, so
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we
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apply
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all
friends
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our friends
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 can stay there and spend our holiday.
Moreover
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, our breakfast and dinner will
be
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also be
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also
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 included
along with
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 the rental plan I have purchased. I have made some plans in which we can go
for
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apply
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hiking and enjoy nature's beauty.
Afterward
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Afterwards
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, we can play some outdoor games
such
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 as basketball and badminton as our rental house
have
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has
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 a giant playground. Apart from that, we can go out for shopping as I have heard
market
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the market
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 area is unique and cheap. I would like to invite you for
this
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 amazing trip
as
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, as
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 we barely get time to catch up in our busy schedule
, you
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. You
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 can
also
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 bring some of your friends
along with
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 you if you want. Looking forward
for
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to
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 your reply. Hope to see you soon Yours, Anita

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coherence
Use one main idea in each paragraph and add words that link ideas, like then, next, and too.
grammar
Check small grammar errors, like subject-verb form and the use of 'to' after 'looking forward to'.
tone
Keep a warm and friendly tone and make the invite clear.
content
Tell more on the plan for the trip and the meals, but keep it short and clear.
content
The start is warm and kind.
content
You tell what you will do and how you will spend time.
content
The invite is clear.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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