You often visit a local music studio to practise singing and record audio recently you recived ana email from the studio manger

1.1 I hope you are doing well
you
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. You
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wont
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won't
believe what happened.I had a yesterday .I went to my daily music
studio
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but
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, but
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unfurtenetely
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unfortunately
this
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studio
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will be closed for 10
day
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days
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.
As
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At
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this
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time I felt very
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disappointed
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becouse
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because
I usually go
to
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apply
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there
which
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, which
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is
loceted
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located
downtown .When I visit
this
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music
studio
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. I often practise singing and record my
voise
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voice
.
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practise
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practice
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singing
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of singing
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very
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is very
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effectivle
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effective
more
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for
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me.I hope
this
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studio
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manager
take
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takes
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full
responsibilty
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responsibility
and
offer
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offers
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strong
instrument
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instruments
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. Talk soon Dilnoza

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grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Put a full stop after each idea.
structure
Make a simple plan: start with what happened, then how you feel, then what you want the manager to do.
content
Add one exact detail like a date or place to make it stronger.
content
You state the idea that the studio is closed and you feel sad.
content
You show what you want from the manager.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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