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You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don’t fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter: Say which points in the article you agree with Explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres Offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

Dear Mr.Perera, I'
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 writing
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 letter regarding your article
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 was in the national newspaper.
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, I
don'tm not
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don't
 agree with some of the points that you mentioned in your article ,
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 as building structure.
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,
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I'm
 a building designer and many of the
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 centres which are built in my area are done by my department. There is a slight difference in each
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 centre.
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 totally agree with the colours which were used for painting the outside walls. We use dark brown as the main theme colour for all
town
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 centres across the country , and
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m
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 agree with the furniture which was the same in all the downtown
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centres
. We ordered all
furniture
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the furniture
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 from Kmart.
Next,
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I'
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 happy to arrange a guided tour for you since
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 not believe that you could understand everything through a single email , so I'
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 offering a tour that will be held next Saturday at 2 pm. I'
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 happy to see you in front mt local
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 centre in Keys Barrow city. Yours faithfully, Lakshan.

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structure
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a short open line, then say which points you agree, then how your town is different, and end with the tour offer.
grammar
Use full sentences. Check mistakes in spelling and mark, and use one tense well.
tone
Keep a calm and polite tone. Be regular in how you tell your points, and avoid big fixes in one line.
format
Check the format: use Dear ... and ending phrase like Yours faithfully, with a comma.
content
You do say you can show a tour.
content
You say you agree with some parts and you offer a tour.
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